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This is a continuation of the Twilight Series written in Bella's View Point so far. This is my prologue and first chapter, tell me what you think. All criticism is accepted, aside from 'This Sucks' because that will not help me, it will only make me feel like crap.

I lived a fairly ordinary life, grew up with my mother and step-father, went to live with my dad. Fell in love with a vampire, married said vampire, and had a hybrid daughter who grew incredibly fast. Well, maybe my life wasn't all so normal, but I still don't see why I ended up here, in this position, where I'm hunting my best friend, and running from those I love.
My name is Isabella Cullen, vampire, mother, and werewolf murderer. I murdered werewolves to protect my family, I avoided my family to protect my family, it's very complicated, but it all starts nine years ago, shortly after my little girl was born, and her life spared. I must inform you the promise to never come near her again, was a broken promise, and we all knew it, but when it came down to the choice. I went back on my own, and struck a deal. They all think I'm dead, for that I'm sure, I've been assigned to kill my best friend, and his pack, and avoid my family all at the same time. Easy right? Not. My best friend and my daughter are best friends, if not lovers by now.
So here I am, back in Forks, Washington, where all of this started and where I wish it would end, but I knew better then that. Life, for me, would never end, and as I approached town I knew avoiding my family was impossible, I was on there territory, I saw a familiar silver volvo waiting at the entrance to Forks, and around it, my old family.
I'd thought threw this, I knew Alice would see me, so I planned around her visions, and wore a disguise, no one would know it was me. My job was to successfully infiltrate their family circle so I could get to Jacob, the easiest way in, was threw my husband. I would have to make him fall in love with me again. I had to be careful though...one mistake and I'd be minced meat, before I could reveal myself to save my life.
The seven of them looked as good as they had the day I left them, well mostly, Edward's eyes had lost something, something he knew he'd never find again. I wanted so badly to tell them all, but for their safety I couldn't. I approached them, and they were weary. Only one question ran through my mind, where was my little girl? My answer was obvious, Edward didn't want to lose her, because she was the last part of me, he had.
After watching my moves Jasper whispered something to Carlise.
“After knowing this was taken territory, you still approached? You are fairly knew, how old are you?” Carlise asked, it's true my eyes still red, marked me as a newbie, but my control made me older then him mentally.
“Nine, I'm Kera Kevins, I was revisiting a vacation spot of mine, I miss it so.” she smiled.
“Can we help you find it? The sooner you are out the easier for all involved.” he put a hand on Edward. Edward didn't like strangers, never did, probably never would.
“It's just this view from one of the trees, I used to spend hours in it, and I want to see it from a new light. It's by a little clearing in the forest.”
“Edward knows where that is!” Alice chimed in, oh Alice your voice, is so comforting.
“Alice!” he warned.
“Really you do?! Can you take me! My memories a little foggy since then....” she smiled “Don't worry I don't hunt humans, and I'm not going to bring anyone with me, I don't have a coven.”
Jasper then looked at me. “Such control, for such a young one with no coven, tell me who created you?”
“Can't remember, wasn't there when I woke up, and I don't miss them...so must not have been important.” I shrugged it off, they all seemed worried I had no conven.
Esme being the mother type, took a step forward “We'd be willing to let you into ours. If that's alright with you, we always have room.”
“That sounds nice but I don't know you well enough to do that.” They'd never trust me if I took her offer without hesitation.
They all looked to each other, and then Edward stepped forward. “Let's go, I want to get this over with.”
Alice looked at him “I'm sorry Edward I'd forgotten....”
He growled at her “Never forget her! We promised we wouldn't!”
“I didn't forget her, I forgot about that clearing's meaning to you.” she muttered.
He stormed off in front of me, and I followed timidly, it was all about the acting. He walked at a fast pace towards the forest, he was the fastest out of them, but I was just as fast, and kept pace with him. He led me threw curve, and pass, and opened up to our clearing. Our secret spot away from, my dad, school, life, it was our peace on Earth.
As I walked into the clearing and my skin sparkled, I heard him catch his breath.
That was never a good sign, it either meant I was found out, or I was now a threat, and I was scared.
It happened so fast I didn't know what had hit me. I was on the floor a minute later, pinned underneath a growling hissing Edward. Hissing at me.
“Who are you!?” he growled demanding. “I know you belong to a coven, what coven is it.”
“I don't! I don't have a coven!” I shouted.
“Who are you!? Why do you know of this place!” he demanded.
“I don't know! Edward! Let me go! Your hurting me!” I said whimpering.
His eyes widened, and he looked at me, looked into my eyes. “You knew my name?” he seemed to be scrutinizing me, and as he pulled my back into what would be a loose ponytail, he gasped again. “Bella....” he muttered.